by Janembo Tue Apr 13, 2010 4:34 pmFirst topic message reminder :
Ok,here it goes.I was reading some very nice fan fictions here(Zerix.cat girl and DJD's were best one congratulations to all 3 of them)so I came to idea to write my own fan fiction.Basicly I wanted to this becouse of several reasons.First one becouse I came on one idea witch I think it is good.Well you be the judge of that.Secnd was becouse I want to get better @ writing,third well I want to impruve my english.Now please be free to say what you think about it.If it sucks say it to fix it.If its nice also its nice
Chapter one:Beggining
In street "National heroes"boy was running away from national forces.Bouth police and man in black were on to him.He was trying to get away far as posible from them.Car crossed his path so he ran in dark alley.There was only one way what was leading out of ally,and it was thrue one door.Boy tried to open them but he couldn't.Door were locked.Police were becoming closer to him every secnd so he had to do some thing fast.He grabed trash cant what was near him and broke door with it.Door led him to one very old kitchen.In it there was a woman standing.
Woman:(scream)A DEAMON!
Boy:Please miss you got to help me there are people chasing me!
Woman just grab knife and throw it towards to boy.
Luckely knife missed him.In that very same secnd police came in.
Police officer:There he is!Bouty for who ever chatches that deamon!
Boy had no where to run exept to uper floor(it was building)
As he was running he heard gun shots from.
At one point he couldn't go more upstairs.There were only one door and one old cubord there.He trew cubord down stairs.
(sound down stairs):Look out!
He open door and he was standing on roof of building.He looked every where but there was no way out.And building was tall atleast 30 meters.He whouldn't survive fall from down there.
Police came on roof.
cheef police officer:This is end of road for you,deamon!
Boy:Is it?
Boy rased his hand.His fist started to shine.But in that very same moment bullet shot him.Boy was falling on ground and going unconcus.As he was falling he heard boices.
(boices in background):Hang in there buddy!
Every thing became blurry and twisted.And then complete darkness...
4 hours later:
Boy finds him self laying down in bandages,but he wasn't on roof any more.He find him self at one room full of cards,consoles and computers.
He tried to get on his feet but every thing hurt.
(sound at back ground):Don't try to move,you need to recover your strenght.
Boy looked to a nother part of room there were two people eating.
Person 1:Now what I told?I knew it this will happen.But no.No one lisgten to a genisus.
Person was a teen about 15 years old.He had very dark black hair,and brown eyes.He was wearing green jacket and on right hand he had some machine and deck of cards in it.
Person 2:Shut up,Golash can't you see he is hurt...Now its not time for arguing he needs to rest.
Person 2 seemed lot more serious than Golash.He was about same age as Golash.He had white hair and blue eyes.He was wearing long black coat.
Boy:Who are you?
(Suprised and in same time)Golash and person 2:What?!
Boy:I will repeat,who are you people?
Golash:You are joking right Janembo?
Janembo:Who is Janembo?
Person 2:You are saying you don't remember any thing?About us,about you,about accident?
Janembo:No I don't...
Chapter one ends.
P.S:I know there are some spelling mistakes...but I just can't find them
Ok,here it goes.I was reading some very nice fan fictions here(Zerix.cat girl and DJD's were best one congratulations to all 3 of them)so I came to idea to write my own fan fiction.Basicly I wanted to this becouse of several reasons.First one becouse I came on one idea witch I think it is good.Well you be the judge of that.Secnd was becouse I want to get better @ writing,third well I want to impruve my english.Now please be free to say what you think about it.If it sucks say it to fix it.If its nice also its nice
Chapter one:Beggining
In street "National heroes"boy was running away from national forces.Bouth police and man in black were on to him.He was trying to get away far as posible from them.Car crossed his path so he ran in dark alley.There was only one way what was leading out of ally,and it was thrue one door.Boy tried to open them but he couldn't.Door were locked.Police were becoming closer to him every secnd so he had to do some thing fast.He grabed trash cant what was near him and broke door with it.Door led him to one very old kitchen.In it there was a woman standing.
Woman:(scream)A DEAMON!
Boy:Please miss you got to help me there are people chasing me!
Woman just grab knife and throw it towards to boy.
Luckely knife missed him.In that very same secnd police came in.
Police officer:There he is!Bouty for who ever chatches that deamon!
Boy had no where to run exept to uper floor(it was building)
As he was running he heard gun shots from.
At one point he couldn't go more upstairs.There were only one door and one old cubord there.He trew cubord down stairs.
(sound down stairs):Look out!
He open door and he was standing on roof of building.He looked every where but there was no way out.And building was tall atleast 30 meters.He whouldn't survive fall from down there.
Police came on roof.
cheef police officer:This is end of road for you,deamon!
Boy:Is it?
Boy rased his hand.His fist started to shine.But in that very same moment bullet shot him.Boy was falling on ground and going unconcus.As he was falling he heard boices.
(boices in background):Hang in there buddy!
Every thing became blurry and twisted.And then complete darkness...
4 hours later:
Boy finds him self laying down in bandages,but he wasn't on roof any more.He find him self at one room full of cards,consoles and computers.
He tried to get on his feet but every thing hurt.
(sound at back ground):Don't try to move,you need to recover your strenght.
Boy looked to a nother part of room there were two people eating.
Person 1:Now what I told?I knew it this will happen.But no.No one lisgten to a genisus.
Person was a teen about 15 years old.He had very dark black hair,and brown eyes.He was wearing green jacket and on right hand he had some machine and deck of cards in it.
Person 2:Shut up,Golash can't you see he is hurt...Now its not time for arguing he needs to rest.
Person 2 seemed lot more serious than Golash.He was about same age as Golash.He had white hair and blue eyes.He was wearing long black coat.
Boy:Who are you?
(Suprised and in same time)Golash and person 2:What?!
Boy:I will repeat,who are you people?
Golash:You are joking right Janembo?
Janembo:Who is Janembo?
Person 2:You are saying you don't remember any thing?About us,about you,about accident?
Janembo:No I don't...
Chapter one ends.
P.S:I know there are some spelling mistakes...but I just can't find them
Last edited by Janembo on Thu May 20, 2010 6:16 am; edited 7 times in total
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